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I envision a world with nothing but peace and love No war, no murder, no bodies found dead in a tub Imagine everyone happy, without a fear for security Smiling, laughing, with no signs of immaturity Now this might sound like quite the impossible task But we can make this dream into reality, peace at last It can take a long time, it might not happen in a century But I believe in world peace, man, we'll get there, eventually
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@GeorgeJensenJr Nice, good technique. I usually read my essays out loud when I end up in that situation but I haven't tried it with more creative writing before
Well said @timeturnerjones! Thanks for the reminder that change can happen @GeorgeJensenJr
Your lines are also pretty close to having the same number of metrical feet as well! Nice work. @GeorgeJensenJr
thanks @greggr, honestly I don't know much about poetry structure and all that, so if you have any tips on how to improve, I'd appreciate it!
@GeorgeJensenJr I'm going to be starting a collection about poetic lines soon; keep an eye out for it! I think you're doing great as is.