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They say true beauty is in the eye of the beholder but I don't believe it. I met an angel one time, she was the sweetest. She gave me reasons to breathe. She may have had her demons but if I hadn't known her I would have never known peace. They say true beauty is in the eye of the beholder but her beauty remained even with her getting older.
I think just editing it would help you explore your ideas. I like to take each line and try to add 4 or 5 lines, and then see what I like, don't like, and go from there! I hope that helps.
yes you are right. I couldn't bring it into play. I couldn't create the words to fit what I started with. you think I should try and rewrite or edit it? it was hard to make it the same plus fix that. I left the intro open lol. I'm new to writing though I'm glad you guys like it enough to even read it thanks!
The opening of this piece with a clear opposition to a very commons saying (I don't believe it) sets the stage for the narrator to explore what they do believe: I'd love to see this extended. Great idea.
The rhyme in this is just as sweet as the meaning--I like it ^^