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Sleepless nights of barrenness and isolation, leave. Your netherworld; it shines no more. Is it not you who fears what lies beneath now? Angry hours of despondency and wretchedness, cease. Your liaisons; they consort no more. Is it not they who lay down their arms now? Unwanted feelings of dereliction and bleakness, depart. Your dominion; it reigns no more. Is it not you who relinquishes control now? Empty years of darkness and despair, die. Your memories; they haunt no more. Is it not they who flee the new day uprising now?
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Like @greggr, what stands out most to me is the turn that each stanza takes at the last line. The image helps to form a kind of misdirection, like the first lines of each stanza, toward darkness, before the sudden movement toward something brighter.
@WordDoctor @DJamesBreaux It's really enjoyable: I love poems that use the poem of the end of stanza as well as the space on the page to make a more interesting impact.
@greggr @WordDoctor I am afraid it is me who is without doubt the one who gets the most enjoyment here you guyz. Because it is so humbling and such an honor to be in the presence of you both and to actually be the recipient of grande praise from literary types of such stature....seriously, kidding me?? Heck yeh, that level of recognition is priceless.... and I'm grateful for it. That goes for you too @onesmile, @Goyo and @timeturnerjones. Thanks you guyz =D
Thank you, @DJamesBreaux! But don't deceive yourself... it is a great pleasure for me and I'm sure these others to interact with you and read your writing as well. I love reading new creations and being able to participate in their blooming process with feedback. Let's keep enjoying this process together!
@WordDoctor Right on Doc, thanks bro =D