2 years ago
Gilbert09
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Attracted.
Im attracted to you like the way water attracts to paper. Or better yet like the way a magnet atttacts to metal. I remember off that rose i would pick every petal. Telling myself she loves me, she loves me not. I hope you do cause your always running in my thoughts. Like a marathon each step is further success until i drop. People tell me that if she ever leaves me to not worry. That theres other fishes in the sea but to me she is the sea.
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I love the images you're trying out, Gilbert09! I like the "water attracts to paper" image because it's not what you usually see - it's really hard to avoid cliches when writing love poetry, especially - so nicely done! I also like how in the last line you use a cliche line but you turn it around to something fresh.