3 years ago
hikaymm
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When Winter Draws Near
When winter draws near, and icy gusts rattle your shutters, you will see my face in the fire. When snow clings to boots, and to sweaters, jackets and scarves, you will miss my hands in your pockets. When candles are lit, and drafts sway their light, you will see my face in the fire. When the lights flicker, and the walls breath and shake, you will miss my arms wrapped around your neck. When snow piles up, and falls in soft, crunching motions, you will miss my ice crystal laughter. When winter draws near, and icy gusts rattle your shutters, you will only see my face on the fire. ----------------------------------------------------- A writing exercise, in response to @greggr 's prompt (http://www.vingle.net/posts/657297)
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The structure here seems to really define what you say in some parts. Ice crystal laughter stuck out as a little strange to me, but overall, really enjoyed it
3 years ago·Reply
@timeturnerjones To be honest that line bothered me too but I still don't know what to do with it. Anyways, it was just an exercise! Thanks!
3 years ago·Reply
@hikaymm, I really liked this. And as the both of you have already mentioned, only that one line felt a bit strange; nonetheless, this is a very nice piece.
3 years ago·Reply
@EdwardIreland Thank you! Glad you liked it.
3 years ago·Reply
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