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The dazzling hue of dusk, Burning away, The remains of the day, The night time speaks, And the stars sing, A Symphony of closure, It warms the soul, Soon bringing dreams, Of escape, of fantasy. Temporary closure, And soon, A new beginning.
I kept feeling like I was going to meet a stopping point (especially at the stars sing) but then you continued to describe what the sing, and only met a stopping point later. Nice! I definitely had to keep reading down the page. That is a lot of commas, though
Yeah, for some reason, my Droid won't allow a capital letter on the next line unless I add unwanted punctuation. Sorry. Software glitch.
@VinceWylde No it's fine, I like some of them! It's just an awful lot :) haha