2 years ago
OmerTurco
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When
What are you thinking When you call me When you are with yours When you are already happy When i am alone When i am not happy When you ask me when When, when, when When are we going to be together Independent of whens
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In the line "when you are with yours" do you mean with their significant other or something like that? Anyways, overall, I like the "when" repetition :)
"Independent of whens" is so much stronger after a poem made up of nearly 30, maybe 40% whens. Interesting~