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Poetry, fingertips numb from pressing down emotions flowing through every letter's curve thoughts so deep, they cut the paper like a razor words written, too shy to be spoken beauty only paper deep
I like this one! I think in the 5th line, the tense is a little off. Maybe it should be "words written, too shy to be spoken" to match the other tenses. But, up to you!
Thank you Hikaymm! I really do appreciate the constructive criticism, it helps me to write better. :-)
@sabrinamoore96 No problem :) I write quite a bit, too, so I understand :) Looking forward to reading more from you ^-^
I really like this! But I'm not gonna lie the second image on the card made me laugh :P